Evening

15Nov07

The birds settle down, the crickets start their
chorus, and outside, the bats rocket around. My mom
and I sit outside by the pool relaxing and getting
lost in the pleasant aroma of her cigarette. She
doesn’t notice if I steal a guzzle of her diet coke.
I sit there looking at the deep blue sky splotched
with pink leftovers of the sunset. I hear the roar of
a muscle car far off. The leaves glint in the
moonlight. Everything grows faint.

by Jonathan, 4th Grade

Filed under: animal, mother, place, poetry, student   |  

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  1. 1 gautami tripathy on November 15, 2007 said:

    “She
    doesn’t notice if I steal a guzzle of her diet coke.”

    Maybe she does.. :D

  2. 2 Jo on November 15, 2007 said:

    Very zen!

  3. 3 paisley on November 15, 2007 said:

    yet another breath of fresh air…..

  4. 4 poetpete on November 15, 2007 said:

    I have been here a couple of times, and I’m always quite impressed. Not sure if you have heard or have any interest, but there is a poetry contest that has a top prize of $10,000 and other prizes. Just click my name for the site. What would the kids do with that money?

  5. 5 Tumblewords on November 15, 2007 said:

    Another wow…incredible writers.

  6. 6 pauline on November 15, 2007 said:

    what a wonderful sense of place and time. well done!

  7. 7 Linda Jacobs on November 16, 2007 said:

    Love the pink splotches! ~Linda

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